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20 April 2013 @ 02:42 am
[Fiction] The Young Prince  
Title: The Young Prince
Prompt: Reverse Gender Roles
Bonus? No
Word Count: 158
Rating: G
Original/Fandom: Original
Pairings (if any) None
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con etc): None
Summary: The young prince has some ideas about the differences between kings and queens.
Note(s): This is the opening piece for a new series/book that I've been thinking about, but I didn't really make any move to start until I had quite a vivid dream a few days ago. The world so far will be an alternate 1571 and I'm sure it won't be too hard to guess who the prince's mother is in this :P


“One day you'll be king,” Simon Bampton, his tutor, said to him.

“Like Mother?” Edward had immediately answered back.

“No, your mother is the Queen. You'll be the King.”

“Everyone will take orders from me?” Edward asked.

“Yes, of course Your Highness.”

“Then I'll be like Mother.”

Simon opened his mouth to speak. But closed it. He watched the young prince.

“What do you mean, Your Highness?”

“Everyone listens to mother while absolutely no one listens to Father. So that means I'll be the Queen.”

“But you are a boy.”

“So?” Edward said shrugging.

“Boys are kings, Edward. Girls are queens.”

Edward put down his quill.

“But they both function the same way, yes?”

“Well yes but-”

“Then I'll be the Queen,” Edward said. “Just like mother.”

Simon shook his head, but a small smile graced his face. The prince was quite the charge.

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Es'kaeska818 on April 20th, 2013 06:19 pm (UTC)
-laughs-

For a piece that is pretty much dialogue, this is very strong. I love how logical the prince is - very much like most children are at young ages. They see so much, and learn from it, and obviously Edward has picked up on the fact that his mother is the one who is really in charge. I love the conclusions that he draws from observations! I also really like the way he puts down his quill in that very serious manner - I can see him with a face like "look, it's simple really, why don't you understand?"

Very nicely done, and so much conveyed in such a short piece!
love_poetesslove_poetess on April 20th, 2013 06:29 pm (UTC)
I'm so glad you liked it! Most of my writing tends to be dialogue heavy as I work with it the best, but I've been trying to shake it up a bit...with varying results.

Thank you for reading!
Mimi The Musemimithemuse on April 20th, 2013 11:43 pm (UTC)
Oh my gosh, this piece was so cute! I love that Edward sees the truth of the situation even if he's off on the terminology. I also like that Simon eventually gives in and lets him believe what he wants to believe. Yes, I do thing he would be quite the charge!
love_poetess: christinelove_poetess on April 23rd, 2013 11:41 pm (UTC)
Aw thank you! I really love writing kids lately it seems haha.

Thank you for reading!
Hannah Joyhodisemajani on April 22nd, 2013 07:51 pm (UTC)
Oh so cute! I found the piece very humorous and Edward such a darling! I imagine he would be an interesting charge, too, but the stories his tutor must have would be priceless! I love how Edward does not seem to understand the terminology or gender titles correctly, but how he seems to understand who he will be as a grown man. I have a feeling he looks up to his mother more then his father, though? I look forward to reading more!
love_poetess: christinelove_poetess on April 23rd, 2013 11:43 pm (UTC)
You know when I wrote this, I wasn't thinking about which parent he looked up to more, but I'm leaning towards his mother now though haha.

Thank you so much for reading!